Infected

[moonvibe34]

normally what i write is derived more from emotion than creativity. this is my first attempt to blend the two with a fictional character. LTROI has inspired and moved me in so many ways. i've wanted to write something specifically for LTROI and this is what came to me. any and all criticism is welcome and warranted.
http://let-the-right-one-in.com/fancontent/ff/infected

[gary13136]

Ah! The soul of a poet! A breath of fresh air!

I would applaud, but you're not around to take a bow. That was really, really great; you just made my day.

Personally, I'm more than ready for an encore, if you have one. Perhaps some of the other fan fiction writers would like to add poetry to their efforts??????

[a_contemplative_life]

Wow. Deeply emotional.

So, for moonvibe and anyone else who responds to this poem, what is this telling us? That there may be a part of us that wants to give ourselves to Eli? To put our life at her feet? And if that is true, why would we feel that way?

[drakkar]

Well, not literally. But emotionally I'm lost too.

[HonzaP]

I think I should probably write my opinion there as well, when the Off topic thread it locked:
"I think that if Eli would read your Infected she would maybe left Oskar and went to you, and in case Oskar would read it then he would be really jealous "

[drakkar]

Or moonvibe is a mind reader and was inspired by Oskar's thoughts..

[HonzaP]

Or moonvibe is a mind reader and was inspired by Oskar's thoughts..

that's also the option

[moonvibe34]

Wow. Deeply emotional.

So, for moonvibe and anyone else who responds to this poem, what is this telling us? That there may be a part of us that wants to give ourselves to Eli? To put our life at her feet? And if that is true, why would we feel that way?

thank you and everyone else for taking the time to view my "poem". Eli is certainly a tragic and tortured character and one that has captured my own imagination and emotions. i sometimes see her as a stray and i guess i have a heart for strays, as i have two cats that can vouch for that. at the same time i feel i understand her need and desire to be wanted and accepted by someone genuine. acceptance and understanding are basic needs really but when they've been witheld for so long they become desperate needs. many veins of thought flowed into this collection of words but ultimately i just asked myself "What does Eli want or need to hear from someone." I guess i have put myself at her feet for reasons i have yet to fully understand. i would glady recite my words to her and hope she wouldn't nom me.
i hope Oskar isn't too jealous HonzaP but if he is i think i can take him, maybe.


p.s. if you really enjoyed this please give thanks to Wolfchild as it would not have come to be without his/her support.

[a_contemplative_life]

Eli is certainly a tragic and tortured character and one that has captured my own imagination and emotions. i sometimes see her as a stray and i guess i have a heart for strays, as i have two cats that can vouch for that. at the same time i feel i understand her need and desire to be wanted and accepted by someone genuine. acceptance and understanding are basic needs really but when they've been witheld for so long they become desperate needs. many veins of thought flowed into this collection of words but ultimately i just asked myself "What does Eli want or need to hear from someone." I guess i have put myself at her feet for reasons i have yet to fully understand.

I had not thought of Eli as a "stray," but having considered what you wrote, it does seem to make sense. I think I share a similar attitude. But there is more to it than that, isn't there? And you are right: it is not readily understandable.

[moonvibe34]

[ But there is more to it than that, isn't there?

yes indeed. much more.to: a_contemplative_life

i hope i have not misled you or anyone else concerning my inspiration for Infected. while the thought of Eli as a stray was one of the many thoughts i had it actually had very little influence on my words. Infected is truly my heart felt expression towards a character that i empathize with, as i do Oskar as well.