Discreet is the key ... let the reader work out the rest lol.
I didn't want to linger on his transformation, just let it happen quickly so he wasn't worrying about it any more
Yeah, it was a good moral question. What would you do with one "day" left? I figured that since he was still Oskar all he would want to do would be to eat sweets, listen to some music and not wear his hatgkmoberg1 wrote: ↑Sat Feb 20, 2021 4:08 amYup, very discreet.
But also the earlier material for the chapter was good to think about afterwards. What would any of us go do and look at if we knew there would be no more days out in the sunshine? What would any of us grab to eat and drink if we knew there would be no more days of such items in our diet? Especially on a bright sunny day as I had where I live. And then when I am reading some of the other threads and I find @metoo has provided us with a lovely lovely view of fettisdagsbullar.... mmmm. Right there, I know that what I want to do is try three or four of those and lie in the sunshine somewhere. Ha, sorry, Eli. <burp>
I thought that Eli (and Eliforms) being able to enter someone's home (etc) uninvited even for a short time (as he/she does) poses a problem. I thought that suggested that Eli could knock on anyone's door and grab them from the other side - or run into someone's home - quickly feed and run out before any adverse effects. I wanted to fix this "loophole" to suggest that YES - she can come in uninvited (as seen in the movie etc) but the moment she does so it "disables" her. Can't really move, can't really speak, and definitely can't feed. She is like a fish out of water. In my description she couldn't even speak to Oscar - just muster the energy to tap a message out to him. This was just my own personal take and development on existing material in LTROI - within seconds of her entering Oscar's place she just stands there and I wanted to take that a bit deeper.gkmoberg1 wrote: ↑Sat Feb 20, 2021 4:20 amTime for our Interview With A Vampire Author segment...
One way to think of fan-fiction is that it's a long-form opinion piece. The author often has a statement they'd like to make. And along the way she or he might toss in potentially many opinions or ideas for us to consider. A case in point for this story is the stress on a vampire being uninvited from a premise/house/domicile/flat/hotel-room/pool-house and how that immediately effects our favorite eliform vampire. @andmker, I'm curious where you came up with that, or where you read of that, and how you decided to make it such a key part of the story? I like how you first introduce the notion of it in the tickling scene. And then you have Albin use it as his key weapon to disarm Eli during their meeting. ... Key to this, too, is that Albin is aware of this vampire weakness. My goodness, had he been wrong on that Eli would have rolled her eyes and the game would have been over before he could have better aimed his pistol. I'm then curious whether this is this a general knowledge item in your fan-fic world or did Albin think of it on his own?
That's what's great about the Eliverse it can be interuped in a few different ways lol. I don't feel that I've changed the universe too much, just bending it a bit. I know what you mean with the invitation remaining but I was also thinking about Eliforms needing a separate invite for different entrances. What happens if someone moves flats and someone new comes in? Is the invite for the premises or for the person For my FF when Albin dies the need for an invite dies with him.gkmoberg1 wrote: ↑Sat Feb 20, 2021 8:26 pmI like how you've taken this a resolution to this quirk of eliform vamirism. My take has always been that once an invitation had been accepted, then you've invited the good as well as the bad across the threshold.
Another topic, and this one is still in development as your chapters appear, is the transformation. The novel gives us a lot on this as Virginia undergoes the change, alone, in her flat. From what you have posted, so far, I suspect you are going with an easier process for Oskar (Oscar ). He certainly benefits from Eli being with him, but I am curious of your explanation, at some point (the moment might not be the best, depending on your chapter roll-out) on whether you are sticking with the novel or are presenting a different progression.
All FF will of course be based on the writer's personal interpretation of the story, and we all have different inroads to it. We also need a starting point for our FF, some kind of "what if". You choose "what if the invitation can be undone", and went from there. It is contradicted by neither the novel nor the film, so it remains within the set of all possible Eliverses.andmker wrote: ↑Sat Feb 20, 2021 10:36 pmThat's what's great about the Eliverse it can be interuped in a few different ways lol. I don't feel that I've changed the universe too much, just bending it a bit. I know what you mean with the invitation remaining but I was also thinking about Eliforms needing a separate invite for different entrances. What happens if someone moves flats and someone new comes in? Is the invite for the premises or for the person For my FF when Albin dies the need for an invite dies with him.
I believe the FF section is fully operational for reading - at least I had been able to read it for a while before I asked for and got upload access as well.
I didn't reply to this earlier, so here is my opinion now.andmker wrote: ↑Sat Feb 20, 2021 10:36 pm[...] I was also thinking about Eliforms needing a separate invite for different entrances. What happens if someone moves flats and someone new comes in? Is the invite for the premises or for the person For my FF when Albin dies the need for an invite dies with him.